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Writing "The waitress"
Writing "The waitress" I am always curious about how other people write. So here is how one poem developed for me. I try write each day. I sit down and sometimes 's a line or a thought that I know I want write about. Sometimes I page through my unfinished poems notebook and choose one work on. Other times I read from a favorite poetry anthology until something sparks a poem. This day we had gone for a drive pick up lunch, and I was back at home. I read some from the poetry anthology, and I loved this line by Jane Miller, from her poem "Poetry", in the anthology Gift of Tongues: "We are being made into words even as we speak." and I write this: I return to my room cool dark and deep words having swirled around me all day tempting me to reach out to grab a few to put together into this poem that is today. I like it, but it doesn't really say anything about my day. I love the phrase, "this poem that is today." So what happened today? How can I incorporate something more specific from my day today into the poem? I love writing about nature. Lots of neighborhood trees in my poems. I also often write about things in my head, or about things that are central to I am. Self poems. I try include physical descriptions in my writing, so it's not just unattached thoughts floating around like they do in my head. Rarely, I write about people. could be made into words from today? I remember a waitress from where we got lunch. I have lots of thoughts. (We were wearing masks, but you can still tell when people are smiling.) I return to my room cool dark and deep words having swirled around like the waitress' full skirt. I smile at her and hope her life will be one of many smiles I hope that she will bend her world to suit her instead of being bent by the traditions and proprieties I see filling the space around her those things I grasp and find words in to make this poem that is today. I copy the poem, making slight changes, moving sections so they make more sense to me, scribbling alternate words off to the side. I enjoy writing by hand. I enjoy copying the poem. Sometimes I make changes, sometimes not. The copying is soothing to me. I read the poem out loud and think about line breaks. I try to imagine a stranger reading it. Would they know what I was talking about? I don't want to offend anyone's religious traditions, but that is part of this specific poem. She isn't just any waitress, she's a is clearly part of a very specific tradition. I don't know if the finished poem is "better" than that above, but it's where I end up and feel wanting share with the world. I don't think it has much do with that original quote from Jane Miller, so I will save that for another day. The waitress started March 3rd, 2021 I smile at the waitress and she smiles back so young and unformed being everything that everyone around her expects. Words swirl through the air like her skirt does as she turns lace covering her hair speaking of conventions and traditions that so pretty when you don't have live them. I hope that her life will be filled with many heart-felt smiles and that she will bend her world suit her instead of being bent or broken by all I see crowding the space around her. I return home sort through all these dense heavy thoughts find the words make this poem that is today. |
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so interesting. love that you expressed your thought process
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3/12/2021 8:57 am |
I feel quite a few waitresses in my day
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We all have our different processes. I’ve always admired the writers and lyricists who keep notebooks and create in their own unique styles. As an artist, I was always doodling and sketching ideas and thoughts. But as a author I use a approach that’s best described as “in the zone”. I find for myself it’s more relaxing to write as I go. Usually there’s a line I’ve thought up or a idea I want to explore before I start typing. Sometimes inspiration leads me into a different way but invariably I will write until I feel done. Poems and songs are rarely edited. Stories I take more care with since I want to follow whatever trajectory or story logic I’ve decided upon. Hearing your thought process is always a joy since there is no right way to write beyond the basic mechanics of form and function. Poetry especially allows the rules to be broken as long as your intent is given clearly be it an emotional or rational response you wish to elicit from your readers. Ok I think rambled long enough. Lol. Great work as always My name is MrWrong and I approved this comment
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3/13/2021 1:06 pm |
write on! Please become an Apollo602021 blog follower!
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What will make you smile How is it to have someone smile at you When will you ever notice You are a light in a dark places. You just don't see for your eyes are closed Just open them see who smiling at you Stop feeling alone in a crowded room
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